Post by skidbladnir on Nov 23, 2005 17:03:13 GMT -5
hey guys, as part of my "outsourcing tough work to my online buddies" program, I would like to request your help on a little translation I have to work on for tomorrow evening. It needs to be in a perfect, diplomatic english (brittish english for what it matters) and yea, somehow that's a big responsability :s
I would greatly appreciate if some of you could quickly check out my text and tell me about its mistakes or sentences not sounding very english to you.
Dont hesitate to change sentences totally; it's the idea that matters, doesnt have to be a literal translation anyway.
thanks in advance to the potential little helpers !
here it goes :
GM-FREE REGIONS NETWORKS Declaration of Rennes
November the 30th, Rennes
Conscious of the economic, social and environmental developments at stake in the breakthrough of the technology enabling a modification of the living organisms' genome and more crucially the genome of the very plants intended for an agricultural use, the European regions federated in the GM-Free Regions Network wish to draw the attention of the European Commission, the States and the public opinion of the Union to the three motivations guiding their action.
a -The regions consider of the utmost importance to safeguard on the long run a quality agriculture, not resorting to genetically modified organisms. (i dont know where to put the long run, and wonder if it sounds better than long term or not)
Considering their undeniable impact on landscapes and socio-economic realities, genuine, sound agricultural produc(tion)s should not only be considered as part of Europe’s cultural heritage and diversity but likewise as the core of any regional action (policy peut-être trop francocentré) aiming at promoting the welfare of its consumers.
b - Adding to the threats on biodiversity, phenomenons of irreversibility, potentially entailed by the rampant dissemination of GMOs among wildlife, are of a major concern to the regions worried about the very subsistence of the cycle of life and the welfare of the generations to come.
(« Adding insult to the injury of the threats on biodiversity”... signifierait “Comble des atteintes à la biodiversité.. », mais ça fait peut-être un peu trop Larzac)
c - Finally, European regions fervently call for more liability and democratic control over the resort to genetically modified organisms.
A full transparency on both the conditions of their use and their advantages for the consumers is therefore requested, as well as the implementation of compensation mechanisms for intended or accidental contaminations underwent by producers is asked by the signatories .
Conforted in their stance by the growing, positive response of both public authorities and public opinion, the European regions members of the GM-Free network are now moving towards an increased involvment in an open debate with a broad number of partners, from European bodies to Member States as well as European citizens through non-governemental organizations (NGO).
Progressing within the framework of the Conference of Florence of february 2005 and the Chart of Florence, which (has?) paved the way for the guiding principles of the network, the member regions have started discussions with the European authorities regarding the implications of GMOs widespreading inside the EU and have layed the ground for a cooperation agreement between Europe and Brazil aiming at securing a supply in non genetically modified, proteins-full animal raws ("animal flour" ? what animals eat).
(end of 1st part..)
I would greatly appreciate if some of you could quickly check out my text and tell me about its mistakes or sentences not sounding very english to you.
Dont hesitate to change sentences totally; it's the idea that matters, doesnt have to be a literal translation anyway.
thanks in advance to the potential little helpers !
here it goes :
GM-FREE REGIONS NETWORKS Declaration of Rennes
November the 30th, Rennes
Conscious of the economic, social and environmental developments at stake in the breakthrough of the technology enabling a modification of the living organisms' genome and more crucially the genome of the very plants intended for an agricultural use, the European regions federated in the GM-Free Regions Network wish to draw the attention of the European Commission, the States and the public opinion of the Union to the three motivations guiding their action.
a -The regions consider of the utmost importance to safeguard on the long run a quality agriculture, not resorting to genetically modified organisms. (i dont know where to put the long run, and wonder if it sounds better than long term or not)
Considering their undeniable impact on landscapes and socio-economic realities, genuine, sound agricultural produc(tion)s should not only be considered as part of Europe’s cultural heritage and diversity but likewise as the core of any regional action (policy peut-être trop francocentré) aiming at promoting the welfare of its consumers.
b - Adding to the threats on biodiversity, phenomenons of irreversibility, potentially entailed by the rampant dissemination of GMOs among wildlife, are of a major concern to the regions worried about the very subsistence of the cycle of life and the welfare of the generations to come.
(« Adding insult to the injury of the threats on biodiversity”... signifierait “Comble des atteintes à la biodiversité.. », mais ça fait peut-être un peu trop Larzac)
c - Finally, European regions fervently call for more liability and democratic control over the resort to genetically modified organisms.
A full transparency on both the conditions of their use and their advantages for the consumers is therefore requested, as well as the implementation of compensation mechanisms for intended or accidental contaminations underwent by producers is asked by the signatories .
Conforted in their stance by the growing, positive response of both public authorities and public opinion, the European regions members of the GM-Free network are now moving towards an increased involvment in an open debate with a broad number of partners, from European bodies to Member States as well as European citizens through non-governemental organizations (NGO).
Progressing within the framework of the Conference of Florence of february 2005 and the Chart of Florence, which (has?) paved the way for the guiding principles of the network, the member regions have started discussions with the European authorities regarding the implications of GMOs widespreading inside the EU and have layed the ground for a cooperation agreement between Europe and Brazil aiming at securing a supply in non genetically modified, proteins-full animal raws ("animal flour" ? what animals eat).
(end of 1st part..)